Yeah, I was dying. The cheezy ring tone (some boy band right. Erm... Backstreet Boys or In Sync?), Steve's all, "Golly geez, and hooboys" and all the girls falling head over feet. The snappy dialogue (I envy people who can do snappy dialogue), the really cleverly drawn scenarios, and the fact that it's dialogue heavy, but it doesn't lose the placement of the story... *takes a breath*

Well done!